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I'm a little jealous I'm missing all this action but it's been a great read, some good battle scenes for sure. I kinda like the idea of cyborgish vampires and all their metal limbs ha!
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@ Hespera: haha, I like cyborg type vampires too! It's fun making up all the little gadets they have in their limbs. Hyperborean's chainsaw like left arm...I have no idea where it came from (as with some ideas) but I love it. And don't worry too much about missing all the action, you have a purpose still in the story.
@Puredoom: ha, yep. Say should be saw. I had issues, thanks. 
It'll be fixed in the main document. I might work on it more tonight, I got really excited about the entire thing over the weekend.
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| Alarain considered herself lucky, Lady was the youngest member of BoS, maybe a few years older than Alarain herself and had not been much of a fighter to being with. Alarain blinked and looked around the battlefield, surprised at how many of the Alliance had fallen so far. She also noted with dismay that both Mia and Maida seemed to be missing. |
Begin perchance?
Hehe this is definately better than the last book. Is it going to become a trilogy 
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Whew just finished reading 13 an 14. was a very exciting read.and anguish is officialy my fav char now.reading his battle was so much fun.
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brilliant can't wait for the next chapter
maybe it's just late but i did see a single mistake 
and lol at this
"I’m not interested in having you stare at my groin.” Tiger_claw mumbled
“You’d want Lys to though, right?”
I was just thinking of how awesome Lys’s rack was.” DeathJam said with a chuckle."
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Oh kitty cat girl
She kicks so much more butt that emo Byakuya (yes my first comment has NOTHING to do with the story XD)
Also, lol @ Airliebird analysing during battle. To me that'd seem like too much work.
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i meant i had read 12 and 13 lol. the battle is getting harder to guese a winner lol. nice chpt lys
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@ Swiftdeath: I must be blind... I don't get it...LOOL
@DJ: I like Byakuya, he's cool. Not so much emo, just emotionless...LOL. Kitty cat girl needs more fight scenes.
Eh, he's the 'older' vampire in human years so he would. @Baal: haha, nice. And that's exactly how I want it.
In general:
This is on a brief hiatus, probably for about two weeks or so. I'm doing serious editing on Book One so I can attempt at getting it published and I don't have time to edit and write. I am quite literally down to one day a week where I can do editing/writing so yeah...
There are about... 5 more chapters to book two left, and the epilogue. After that, well we'll see...lol. I know I have about...23...ideas and plots for other novels so yeah. I still plan to get book two done by the New Year, so don't worry too much about waiting too long...lol.
Anyway../ramble. I have to get back to work.
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Byakuya is SO emo, no way you can say he isn't. He's almost as emo as Sasuke. And Kitty cat girl never gets enough fights. If she did, i think they'd have to change the name of the program. Unfortunately shes just got into a fight where i'm up to, and it's darted off to the others instead -.-
AND SLIGHTLY MORE RELATED: T_T I was hoping this was an update... well then, once your done, remember, send it in, and once it gets published (Blind optimist
) then remember, send a few (me) of the (me pweez!) first editions (comon!) to your bestest friends (i wub you! <3)
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Oh darn I thought it was an update too! *tries to wait patiently*
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@DJ: Oi vey. Byakuya isn't ruled by emotions, there for he's not 'emo' or emotional. Sasuke is ruled by anger and hatred, therefore, yes he is 'emo'.... where's Diablo to back me up?? LOL.
Woot for anime based agruments on BW. Yeah, I read the manga so I'm currently waiting for the next installment, I gotta start watching the anime.
No, again, not an update. And I've all ready spoken to a company about publishing, hence the major editing of Book 1 (including name changes
). If all goes well and they like it, I should be a published author sometime in the New Year. I would have about...15 free copies so we'll see who gets what and when...LOL.
@ Hespera and Raxis: lol. Should be up by this weekend, Monday night at the latest. Saturday is the finishing for book 1 and the send in (hopefully) Sunday will be the writing of chapter 15 for book 2. I have everthing plotted out including three fun explosions/twists that will be happening quite soon. Two have been hinted at all ready, so they shouldn't be too big of a surprise. But the third should throw a few people for a loop...lol.
On a total side note, if Book 1 does get published, I will be using facebook as an updating tool so if you want updates on the publishing process of Book 1 (if it happens) you'll have to add me.
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God-dammit you replied but there isn't any updates >_< Evil woman. And Byakuya might not be ruled by EMOtions, but he's still emo XD
And about facebook, remember to REMOVE your picture if you let others know what it is. Otherwise your anonymity will go
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Lysandra
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Haha, sorry DJ. Oh harhar...LOL.
I don't have any pics on facebook so...HA! btw, I friend requested you, and you didn't accept. You're a meanie.
Like I said, CH 15 will be done by Monday night.
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On my way!
Emo? That is very far from being true! All his emotions are controlled and suppressed by logic and law! He can see the broad picture and acts as required. Those are the attributes why I have him as my avatar.
*patiently waiting for Monday*
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All his emotions are controlled and suppressed by logic and law! He can see the broad picture and acts as required. Those are the attributes why I have him as my avatar.
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That sounds like Spock 
I am anxiously awaiting the next update Lysandra!
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Grr everytime i see a reply here i think another chptr has been posted. cmon lys we need our fix im goin cold turkey here
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Hey Lys - long time no speak. I promise I have not fallen off the face of the earth
OK guys - I know Lysandra could produce the work you are after in a very short amount of time - HOWEVER - it would not be to the best of her great ability.
Writing is a very patient art. Sometimes chapters come really quickly and sometimes they can stump you for months till you get that breakthrough.
We have all read her work (Which IMO - you should look to have that first book published or at the very least - have aditor give you idea to head you in the right direction) and we all love it. It has formed part of our morning ritual.
Cup of tea
Couple of quests
Read Lys's story.
End of.
Lys - just for you - my next chapter for my Vamp story should be posted shortly. Mortis convinced me to write the next chapter for it and leave the Sci Fi alone for a minute.
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Awwww Lys do I have to die?
“You’re…how did you?” Demandred tried to ask. Lestat turned to him, eyes blazing bright blue. The sadistic grin widened as Lestat licked his lips. Alje dropped his weapons. Lestat laughed and disappeared, only to appear again behind Demandred, one long fingered hand pushed through the BoS member’s chest and griping his heart. As Demandred felt death claim him, Lestat leaned low and whispered in his ear.
“I’m a fucking mage dumbass. I’m so doped up on healing pills, nothing can kill me.”
Other than me dying good read
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loving it XD somthing strange and funny about missing people and splating some one else XD its a grate read it really is
can't wait till the next parts
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Epic XD got to love the
ghost busters comment there
should of asked for a number for them though...
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Woo I got a back story! Very cool although it makes me have even more questions! Haha!
I don't know why but I kind of evision La Puce looking somwhat like The Joker in The Dark knight as he's driving in the bus.
Thanks for the update
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I think La Puce is basically the Joker, Hespera
Still good chapter... I was worried you were killing off Anguish
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that was amazing lys, just epic, simply the sex
so when does the ginger bus driving fool die?
love your favourite tiger
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@ spawn... ahah:"Who ya gunna call? GHOST BUSTERS! *cue the music*" LOL
@ Hespera: It's one of those opened type back stories where you get some information but not a lot...lol. I actually didn't watch the Dark Knight, but I have seen pictures of that Joker...haha. Ah yes, Puce brings some somewhat needed insanty to the story.
@ Raxis: hehe, yes, in a sense he is. He brings insanity and comic relief. I have to say, one of my favorite lines in this chapter is Lest's: "Are those...bombs?" It makes me laugh so much...I don't know why.
Nah, Anguish isn't dying...yet...lol. Ah, I'm not 100% who I'm killing off in the next little bit to be honest. I have the plan and all but techincally it got changed as I went along.
Originally the three twists were supposed to happen, then DJ would kill Nate, Helldemon would freak out and get distracted then die, then XXXX would kill XXXX and XXXX would freak out and get killed...yeah...haha. The last three haven't been killed or seen to kill anyone yet so XXXX.
@ Smierc: haha the sex.
La Puce... well. You'll see what happens to our beloved flea in the epilogue of this book. So in... 3 chapters...LOL. Holy crap, that's probably going to be like 3 weeks from now... I still have to edit the last few chapters of book one... another 100 pages and fix the epilogue...dang.
In general:
Next chapter should be up by next week Sunday/Monday unless I decide to write a bit instead of sleeping tomorrow. I have a day off with a few appointments and what not so yeah, I might edit or I might write...depends on my mood...lol.
Anyway, I'm off! lol
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I think La Puce is basically the Joker, Hespera
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great read as always. and like raxis i taught anguish was a goner.
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Thanks Lys for the nice comments. Also Apologies to what I did to Le Stat - Hope you don't feel too bad about it.
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"If anything, chapter 16 will be up by Monday evening,"
glares puts away my reading glasses and sulks that there is no more of the sotry posted when i got home from college was so looking forward to reading more ~_~
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completly forgot bout abby lol. but wow haha the hell beast. she cant control it cause she is white mage? and u need to be a deathdealer or blak mage to control it? if im right do i get a cookie
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Very nice lys
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YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!! UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FRICK YEAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*reads*
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